View Full Version : Rap Revising

05-09-2012, 10:44 PM
I see there was no thread made yet...

Anyway, can one of the revisers look over this battle for me?

[spoiler:221fmd3l]*Batman glides down into a dark alley in London*

Batman: Come on out, Sherlock! I am not finished with our battle!

*a voice shouts back from around the corner*

???: Are you sure that the person you are looking for is here?


Batman: I know it's you, Sherlock! Come out and face me!


*Batman runs around the corner to see a hovering figure*

Batman: Since when did you have powers, Holmes?


???: The Sherlock Holmes you're looking for isn't here.

*??? turns around and a mask closes around his face*




Iron Man:
You had your chance with Holmes, now let the Avengers Assemble!
There is no Justice in a League that's so keen to dissemble!
What's the point in keeping a secret that everybody knows?
It screams out so greatly, even your interest in Robin shows!
There is nothing to protect because your mom and dad are dead!
And it's obvious your bat pyjamas doesn't get you lots of head.
When women stay at your place, it's a f*cking girl's night out!
While you're crying out your feelings, my metal rod makes them shout!
I have an invincible suit of iron, you're wearing a bullet proof vest!
You're just about as knowledgeable as Live Action's Adam West!
Stark Industries is advancing the world with its surprises,
While Gotham's left in the darkness with Wayne Enterprises.
What kind of a genius would go chasing around the insane?
Your methods are so senseless, no wonder you got killed by Bane.
You fail at being a superhero and at being a great detective.
Now go grow a f*cking set instead of being super-sensitive!

You think you are 'the shit' because your team's on the big screen?
You're so damn low on the B-List, everyone thinks you're a machine!
I'd rather battle the Tinman, at least he can put up a decent fight!
This Dark Knight's rising higher than your repulsor's beam of light!
I should let Alfred slap you silly, help you fix your brain's function.
But instead you're stuck with Jarvis having an ultimate malfunction.
I have a f*cking Batmobile, you're looking like the Iron F*ggot.
My utility belt is packing tricks, I'm like the modern Inspector Gadget!
You couldn't keep charge of S.H.I.E.L.D, let alone run a business.
I'm nailing you harder than H.A.M.M.E.R, there's no way you can win this!
You started a Superhero Civil War! Caused Steve Rogers's assassination!
And don't forget World War Hulk, and the god damn Skrull Invasion!
You've made so many mistakes, no wonder you're so f*cking depressed.
You'll keep turning to the bottle, wishing Pepper Potts would get undressed,
In front of your drunken ass! But we all know that's a great over-statement.
The only love you can manage is when your face kisses the pavement!



YOU DECIDE![/spoiler:221fmd3l]

05-10-2012, 12:51 AM
It's alright.

05-10-2012, 06:25 AM
EPIC battle, Dion! Can't wait for your season 2. This is good. :)

05-10-2012, 04:16 PM
Thanks, guys.
Just need Gliscor to look it over for me. :)

05-10-2012, 04:24 PM
im not a reviser but i enjoyed this battle very much!

Straw Hats
05-11-2012, 09:42 PM
This battle was epic!

05-12-2012, 01:15 AM
I Guess I Can Revise it, Right? i think A Leader Should Be Able To Do Pretty Much Any Job :/

Straw Hats
05-12-2012, 01:22 AM
I Guess I Can Revise it, Right? i think A Leader Should Be Able To Do Pretty Much Any Job :/
Yes Master! :zombie: lol

05-12-2012, 01:53 AM
Someone plz? ;w;

05-12-2012, 02:05 AM
I Don't Really See Any Bd Things About It. Quite The Kick off For Season 2!