Presidential Reviews

Can you review my Spiderman Vs. Tarzan please http://www.erboh.com/forum/showthrea...l=1#post371766

You know what time it is :) A review of Funnybone's comeback battle- http://www.rappad.co/rap/44210

Eh, review dis pls, i guess. http://www.erboh.com/forum/showthrea...100#post375100

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Here's my review of EDX's Escapement. Next is Gunnut vs. Clemi.

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Part 1: Pretty intriguing opening, I must say. I've seen a lot of stories begin with someone talking about losing their families, but this is probably the first time I've seen a story begin with someone saying that THEY killed their family. Lots of emotion too. 9.5/10

Part 2: This chapter isn't as exciting as the others because there's not as much going on. I guess that can't be helped. There's still a lot of emotion, descriptive detail, and a bit of a more subtle sense of suspense than the other chapters. 8/10

Part 3: This is definitely the most suspenseful chapter. The emotion is still here too, and the cliffhanger is great too because it really doesn't drop any hints. The guy at the end could be literally anyone, and we have no idea and want to keep reading. 9.5/10

Total Score: 27/30

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Thanks man! Beautiful review as always ^^

Review Me vs ERB Crazy D:

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Originally Posted by Turtlesauce

Review Me vs ERB Crazy D:

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http://www.erboh.com/forum/showthrea...l=1#post375169

Here's the link for him

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Originally Posted by Clemi

http://www.erboh.com/forum/showthrea...l=1#post375169

Here's the link for him

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Merci beacoup, bro

Here's my review of Gunnut vs. Clemi. Next is Warhol vs. Van Gogh.

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Gunnut-Round 1: First few lines are more referencey than jokey. The Wisconsin line is decent, but it seems kind of random in a battle between Gunnut and Clemi. I liked the cession line a fair amount though. The French lines are decent, nothing brilliant but nothing terrible. 8/10

Clemi-Round 1: First line is pretty good, and the second line is too but it's a bit unrelated to the two rappers involved here. The Franglish line is both a good line for a parody and a good line on its own, and the last three lines are all good references. 8.5/10

Gunnut-Round 2: The infraction line could've made for a better joke. Granted, the real Valentine's Day massacre line wasn't that good either, but still. I like the Eiffel Tower line and the Nutella line, but some of the references here seem kind of pointless. Like the 2,000 members line, I mean, you're both on the forum, so I don't see how that's threatening. 8/10

Clemi-Round 2: The first line isn't really a dis, the rapestick line isn't that clever, but I guess the neg rep line is decent. The Cleminem line is good, and the Breaking Bad reference is decent. Probably the weakest verse in the battle, but it's got some decent references. 8/10

Overall: It's making enough references, just perhaps not enough jokes and disses. There are also a few lines that focus more on making a good parody of the original line than being a good standalone line. But that's only in parts, most of the battle doesn't suffer from those problems. The battle is still a nice parody that's fun to read. 8/10

Gunnut's Best Line: When I impale you on La Tour Eiffel like a slimy crustacean
Gunnut's Worst Line: I'm a gutty gun nut, rhymes flowing with terse.
Clemi's Best Line: Or see your native tingue ripped out with your annoying franglish, and get rekt.
Clemi's Worst Line: I'm a bit slow that's right, but I do it fine,

Final Results:
Gunnut: 16/20
Clemi: 16.5/20

Total Score: 40.5/50

*Worst verse of battle*

*Same score as two other verses*

*Gunnut still loses by half a point*

Anyway, I like that both of the best lines are threats and the worst lines are self boost lines.

Tfw think of a good line to replace worst line.

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Originally Posted by Sambaba

Total Score: 40.5/20

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I love getting 200% scores.

http://www.erboh.com/forum/showthrea...487#post375487

This please.

I don't think you've reviewed Me vs Wumbo ft. Polar. http://www.erboh.com/forum/showthrea...l=1#post371122

Never 5get ;-;

Review my remade Fidel Castro vs. Julius Caesar? http://www.erboh.com/forum/showthrea...l=1#post374076

If it's not too much trouble, could you potentially review my latest battle on the list, The Cutie Mark Crusaders VS Peep, Quack and Chirp?
http://www.erboh.com/forum/showthrea...l=1#post375555

Here's my review of WardenOfTheNorth's Andy Warhol vs. Vincent van Gogh. Next is Mods vs. Members.

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Andy Warhol-Round 1: The first two lines are pretty generic insults, nothing too clever. I sort of like the gunshot comparison and the cypresses line, and the mute line is pretty great. Also a pretty awesome ending line. 8.5/10

Vincent van Gogh-Round 1: Again, a bit of a weak start with generic insults, but the Starry Night reference is pretty good. The hair line is generic, the pop art line is kind of obvious, the Factory line isn't really a dis or a boast, but the last line is great. 7.5/10

Andy Warhol-Round 2: The painting others line is OK, nothing excellent. The middle two lines aren't any sort of reference, as far as I'm aware of, so they just seem like filler lines. The last line is funny, but pretty obvious, and probably not quite as good as the last ear joke. 7/10

Vincent van Gogh-Round 2: First line's OK but a pretty generic insult, and the soup cans line is pretty good. The last two lines are just setting up and an ending joke that doesn't reference anything, so kind of a weak ending. 7.5/10

Overall: It has a few nice disses, and can definitely do a good job of mixing a reference with a joke. It could definitely be better though. There are a few lines that are pretty generic disses that could be used against almost anyone. Try to reference something specific in every line. 7.5/10

Andy Warhol's Best Line: Vince when I'm done with you you'll be pushing Sunflowers
Andy Warhol's Worst Line: How your shit became famous is really quite a wonder
Vincent van Gogh's Best Line: I'd beat you any day, any Starry Night
Vincent van Gogh's Worst Line: Just look at your hair! Such a downright ugly sight

Final Results:
Andy Warhol: 15.5/20
Vincent van Gogh: 15/20

Total Score: 38/50

Eh fuck it, why don't you review the Replace ERB with Forumers I did with ranger?
http://www.erboh.com/forum/showthrea...l=1#post375686

Also something that may help you get some references, here's an X and Y battle video (I'm Paul in this one)
V9RG-WWWW-WWW8-NB2M

http://www.erboh.com/forum/showthrea...d=1#post375722

this pls

also Loh i'm too lazy to post this in your thread but you do it too

I don't think polar will mind you reviewing this. http://www.erboh.com/forum/showthrea...l=1#post338871

We both sucked at rapping at the time, but eh.

Gregory Nathaniel Terry's a reference to a name Umby made up based on my GNT-005 username, btw.

Could you please review Mark Twain vs. Ernest Hemingway
http://www.erboh.com/forum/showthrea...s-Rap-Battles&

Here's my review of Mods vs. Members. Next is Elsa vs. Sub-Zero.

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Mods-Round 1: Spart's first line is mainly just set-up, nothing too brilliant. The second line is decent, the third and fourth lines aren't really references. I like the Dylan reference, but the rest of the verse doesn't have any boasts or disses. Lawl's 6 foot lesson line and razor sharp facts line are both pretty good, so I think Lawl is the best of the mods. YN's first two lines are references, but they aren't really boasts or disses. I can't tell if "Pussy Pounder" is a reference or not, but the last line is a pretty good transition. Hanako's second line is good, but her third line is a jokeless reference and her last line is a referenceless joke. Last four lines don't really make any jokes. Most of them are pretty obvious. 7/10

Members-Round 1: The Dion lines aren't too original, pretty obvious jokes to make. The rapesticking line isn't really a joke, but the dildocopter reference is pretty funny. Nutty's first line is pretty good, but his second line is pretty much completely filler. Adonis' first line is also pretty filler, and the chairleg line doesn't really make sense. There are definitely better chairleg jokes you could make. I like Lohuy's last line a fair amount though. 7.5/10

Mods-Round 2: The immature line is pretty obvious take-off the original. The second and third lines aren't really jokes either. The TDFE reference is good, but aside from that, this is probably the weakest verse in the battle. 7/10

Members-Round 2: The Lando in line is kind of a stretch, but it's a decent pun. The spam line is pretty great. Third line isn't much of a reference, and the last line is kind of confusing. Mod Watchtower of cookies? I don't really get it. Still, first two lines are good. 8/10

Overall: I feel like most of this battle focused more on just trying to parody the original line than trying to make lines that are good on their own. There's a lot of filler lines, and a few references that don't really have jokes. Still a fun battle, but it felt a bit rushed and could've been better. 7.5/10

Mods' Best Line: I wreck any member with razor sharp facts (Oops!)
Mods' Worst Line: I'm a mod, membs, so let's get it on
Members' Best Line: You guys attract more spam than a Hawaiian dinner
Members' Worst Line: I'm an overall great member mothafucka!

Final Results:
Mods: 14/20
Members: 15.5/20

Total Score: 37/50

Here's my review of URBOF's Queen Elsa vs. Sub-Zero. Next is Sam Fisher vs. Agent 47.

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Beat: Oh yes. This is incredible. So much variety in the instrumentals, really intense and exciting, catchy, fits both of the rappers well, it's just excellent all around. Maybe a bit more fitting for Elsa than Sub-Zero, but if that's the biggest complaint, then you've got a good beat. 9.5/10

Impressions: Elsa's voice isn't spot on or anything, but she doesn't have a distinctive voice so it's not that distracting. At least the singing's pretty great. The effects on Sub-Zero's voice are pretty good too, so I can't complain much here either. 8/10

Queen Elsa-Round 1: The babe-ality line is alright, not brilliant, but it's a good reference. I like the cruel heart line, but the adolescent princess line isn't really a boast or a dis so it seems a bit pointless. The next two lines aren't too clever, but I like the Noob line a lot and the fractal line is pretty good too. I don't really see the point of adding in the "Snow glows white" part. It sounds cool, but again, it doesn't really make any sort of point, and neither does the Armageddon line, really. The last two lines are pretty good references though. 8/10

Sub-Zero-Round 1: First line is kind of filler, but the second line is a pretty good reference, as is the Raiden reference. I also like the Cold Shoulder pun, but the next two lines are more references than jokes. The Khan line isn't too clever, but it's funny. The Nazi line's OK, but I've kind of seen the joke before, although I really like the Frosty line. The next few lines don't have a great reference to joke ratio, but the last line is a nice little pun. 7.5/10

Queen Elsa-Round 2: First line is a decent reference, not too clever but it at least makes a point. There are better Olaf jokes that could've been made, but it's not a bad line. The cryomance line is alright, but I really like the Zero line. The Scorpion line is good, but it seems like it's just pointing out one of Sub's feats without really dissing it, so it's a bit of a counter-productive line. The Let It Go line had to be done and it could've definitely been a lot worse than this one. 8/10

Sub-Zero-Round 2: The first line isn't really that clever, and the second line isn't much of a reference. The marshmallow-hard to swallow pair is pretty funny, and the Hans line is even funnier. Really like the pain of my fist line, and while the last lines are kind of obvious, they did have to be done, and much like the Let it Go line, it could've been much worse. This is the best verse in the battle, and it wins it for Sub-Zero. 9/10

Overall: The battle is pretty great. Nice references, good puns, sounds great and the editing is also probably the best I've seen from any non-live action fan made battle. The lyrics aren't perfect, as at times there isn't a great joke to reference ratio, and there are also a few filler lines here and there. Still, those flaws aren't too noticeable in this because there's so much to like in it. 8/10

Queen Elsa's Best Line: Forget the sub, emphasize on the zero!
Queen Elsa's Worst Line: I'm winning this for all the adolescent princesses
Sub-Zero's Best Line: It’s windy in here, feel my breath, FROSTY!
Sub-Zero's Worst Line: I fucked you up the first time with the words I spew!

Final Results:
Queen Elsa: 16/20
Sub-Zero: 16.5/20

Total Score: 58/70 (equivalent to 41.5/50)

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Here's my review of URBOF's Queen Elsa vs. Sub-Zero. Next is Sam Fisher vs. Agent 47.

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Beat: Oh yes. This is incredible. So much variety in the instrumentals, really intense and exciting, catchy, fits both of the rappers well, it's just excellent all around. Maybe a bit more fitting for Elsa than Sub-Zero, but if that's the biggest complaint, then you've got a good beat. 9.5/10

Impressions: Elsa's voice isn't spot on or anything, but she doesn't have a distinctive voice so it's not that distracting. At least the singing's pretty great. The effects on Sub-Zero's voice are pretty good too, so I can't complain much here either. 8/10

Queen Elsa-Round 1: The babe-ality line is alright, not brilliant, but it's a good reference. I like the cruel heart line, but the adolescent princess line isn't really a boast or a dis so it seems a bit pointless. The next two lines aren't too clever, but I like the Noob line a lot and the fractal line is pretty good too. I don't really see the point of adding in the "Snow glows white" part. It sounds cool, but again, it doesn't really make any sort of point, and neither does the Armageddon line, really. The last two lines are pretty good references though. 8/10

Sub-Zero-Round 1: First line is kind of filler, but the second line is a pretty good reference, as is the Raiden reference. I also like the Cold Shoulder pun, but the next two lines are more references than jokes. The Khan line isn't too clever, but it's funny. The Nazi line's OK, but I've kind of seen the joke before, although I really like the Frosty line. The next few lines don't have a great reference to joke ratio, but the last line is a nice little pun. 7.5/10

Queen Elsa-Round 2: First line is a decent reference, not too clever but it at least makes a point. There are better Olaf jokes that could've been made, but it's not a bad line. The cryomance line is alright, but I really like the Zero line. The Scorpion line is good, but it seems like it's just pointing out one of Sub's feats without really dissing it, so it's a bit of a counter-productive line. The Let It Go line had to be done and it could've definitely been a lot worse than this one. 8/10

Sub-Zero-Round 2: The first line isn't really that clever, and the second line isn't much of a reference. The marshmallow-hard to swallow pair is pretty funny, and the Hans line is even funnier. Really like the pain of my fist line, and while the last lines are kind of obvious, they did have to be done, and much like the Let it Go line, it could've been much worse. This is the best verse in the battle, and it wins it for Sub-Zero. 9/10

Overall: The battle is pretty great. Nice references, good puns, sounds great and the editing is also probably the best I've seen from any non-live action fan made battle. The lyrics aren't perfect, as at times there isn't a great joke to reference ratio, and there are also a few filler lines here and there. Still, those flaws aren't too noticeable in this because there's so much to like in it. 8/10

Queen Elsa's Best Line: Forget the sub, emphasize on the zero!
Queen Elsa's Worst Line: I'm winning this for all the adolescent princesses
Sub-Zero's Best Line: It’s windy in here, feel my breath, FROSTY!
Sub-Zero's Worst Line: I fucked you up the first time with the words I spew!

Final Results:
Queen Elsa: 16/20
Sub-Zero: 16.5/20

Total Score: 58/70 (equivalent to 41.5/50)

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Yeeee! Thanks!

Just as a clarification, This battle will be your last! is a reference to Sub-Zero's pre-fight quote, This fight will be your last!
Also Legacy and Armageddon are two of the Mortal Kombat movies. (So she's literally ripping on the movie while ripping on the movies with the Legacy line)
Ironically the Optic Blast line is a Street Fighter reference, felt like throwing in one to a similar fighting game.

One more battle with Gonad in it. http://www.erboh.com/forum/showthrea...834#post375834

Here's my review of GonadtheNomad's Sam Fisher vs. Agent 47. Next is rangernumberx vs. Clemi.

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Sam Fisher-Round 1: First line isn't that clever, while the second line is alright, nothing brilliant. The Absolution line isn't bad, while the next line is OK. The AK47 line is more of a reference than a joke, but I like the 7-Eleven line a lot. The GamesRadar line is another jokeless reference, and the fact that he's only #37 isn't too impressive. The Mark and Execute line is a bit obvious, but it's still good. Last two lines are decent references. None of the lines in this verse are THAT great (aside from the 7-Eleven line) but there are a lot of just "above average" lines that make this a good verse. 8.5/10

Agent 47-Round 1: The first line is just filler, and the second line isn't really a dis. Most of this verse is pretty blunt, and not very subtle. That's not to say the lines are bad, it just none of them really blow me away. Probably because most of them are more reference-y than joke-y. 7.5/10

Sam Fisher-Round 2: The disguises line is a pretty good reference, but the second line is pretty filler. The silverballers pun is funny, while the last line sort of wastes a line on a reference that could've have been used for a better joke, instead of just bringing it up. 8/10

Agent 47-Round 2: I don't like how the first line just references Briggs and doesn't make any jokes, and the second line just follows up on that and doesn't really add anything. The Splinter Fell line isn't brilliant, but it's funny, and the last line is an alright reference. 8/10

Overall: The biggest problem with this battle is that there are too many references and not enough jokes. That's definitely better than having it the other way around, but still, most lines in this battle are just "good", very few of them reach "greatness". 7.5/10

Sam Fisher's Best Line: There's better killers than you in the cigarette aisle of 7-Eleven
Sam Fisher's Worst Line: I'm a soldier, served for twenty years
Agent 47's Best Line: I'll make it look like you Splinter Fell to your death
Agent 47's Worst Line: You can't seriously think your games are at all superior

Final Results:
Sam Fisher: 16.5/20
Agent 47: 15.5/20

Total Score: 39.5/50

thx u sem :3

not for the review, for saying Sam won.

http://www.erboh.com/forum/showthrea...870#post375870

this pls.

Keep in mind some of it is comedic relief, like I was trying to be funny in the battle. Like a master sword joke and the last line. I thought it was a nice change of pace.

Here’s my review off rangernumberx vs. Clemi. Next is Harry Potter vs. Luke Skywalker.

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Clemi: Don’t want to do a weird format for this so I’m just going to lump all the verses into one category. Anyway, in the first verse, the first line is pretty good, but the second line isn’t really a reference to anything. There are better “Real Lime Shady jokes” that could be made, and then the next few lines are hardly references. I like the teabagged line, and the last line is a decent reference. In the second verse, the only line I really like is the God of Bronies line. The first and third lines aren’t really references, and the last line is kind of a broad reference. The parodies in the third verse are pretty good alternatives. I also like the class pun and the colony threat at the end. 16.5/20

rangernumberx: The Real Lime Shady reference is pretty good, but it’s not really a boast or a dis, so it seems kind of pointless. I didn’t know Clemi’s height was a thing on here, so I wasn’t a huge fan of the Napoleon line, but the rolling one line is a pretty good reference. The chatbox adventures line is a bit of a miss for me, but I like the Rémi and Scenes from a Hat references. The last line has potential, and it’s not bad, but it’s just not too clever. The admin joke in the second verse is kind of wasted. It’s just mentioned, there’s no dis or anything. The wimps line is also a bit too obvious. The iron mask line is pretty good though. As for the last verse, I might be missing something on the first line, but it seems kind of filler. I really like the Glass Joe reference, and the Les Miserables line is pretty blunt but still funny, much like the original Space Jam line. 16/20

Overall: Pretty good battle, all things considered. While the reference to joke ratio isn’t always perfect, it’s pretty consistent for the most part. There are also a lot of filler lines, which isn’t good. But there’s a lot more good than bad here. 8/10

Clemi's Best Line: Why don't you give up that battle like you did to roll to dodge ?
Clemi's Worst Line: Cause you've don't have nothing in your head and nothing on your crotch
rangernumberx's Best Line: I'll leave you like Glass Joe, asleep on the floor!
rangernumberx's Worst Line: I'll clear the forum of you in ten seconds flat.

Final Results:
Clemi: 16.5/20
rangernumberx: 16/20

Total Score: 40.5/50

Here's my review of Harry Potter vs. Luke Skywalker. Next is Clemi vs. rangernumberx.

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Beat: This beat is pretty boring. It at least fits the rappers, so it’s not TERRIBLE, but it’s just sooooo repetitive. It’s got little to no variety and rarely changes any notes. 5/10

Impressions and Costumes: The Harry costume isn’t terrible, but Luke’s costume seems way too simple. Where’s his belt? The impressions are non-existent. Really, Harry’s voice is just a British accent. I don’t care how crappy it is, just a British accent would be OK. Was that so hard to do? 3.5/10

Harry Potter-Round 1: The first line is actually a pretty decent set up, and it makes me think the punchline will be something cool, but nope just "threw pride down the drain". "Duke Guystalker" is....well it's an effort so I'll give it a bit of credit. The Han Solo thing is just so hilariously tryhard. The kissing sister joke is one of the most exploitable jokes you could make about Luke, and it's pretty much just wasted here. It's not even a dis, it's just a question. I don't get the "flipping batons" thing, but I guess the Obi Wan joke is OK. 5.5/10

Luke Skywalker-Round 1: The first two lines are completely referenceless. The dad line is an attempt, but just saying “you don’t have a dad” isn’t really that much of a dis to me, and the uncle line is just a pretty generic insult. I could’ve seen the number of movies line going somewhere, but it fails because they messed up Luke’s line. If he had said “I could do it in 3", it wouldn’t have been bad, but they got the reference wrong. Now I don’t even know what happened to the audio at the Deathly Hollows line, but it’s a lame line either way, and the Daniel Radcliffe reference is completely wasted here. 4/10

Harry Potter-Round 2: The Hermoine Granger line is alright, I guess, at least it’s a reference. I don’t think there’s much I can say about the Return of the Jedi line. Just WHY. The number of chins line is probably the biggest laugh of the battle outside the lines where Harry does....the thing. The Tatooine line isn’t bad though. At least this verse has two semi-decent lines. What I’ve noticed in this review is that while Luke has weaker lines, Harry is more laughably bad. 6/10

Luke Skywalker-Round 2: The letter line has potential, but it just comes off as stupid in the end, especially with the wacky text effects. I don’t know if the car line is supposed to be a threat or a dis or whatever, but either way it’s a wasted reference. “What kind of a name is Harry Potter?” I don’t know, why don’t you tell me what’s wrong with that name instead of just implying it’s a bad name? Just make a joke or a pun or SOMETHING. I don’t think Skywalker Slaughter is a reference to anything, so I don't like it. The last line is just complete and utter wat. Verbal father? What does that even mean? How is that a dis, or a boast or a threat or I don’t even 1.5/10

Overall: This battle is just rushed. Most of it seems like it was done freestyle, which is NOT a good thing for a pre-written battle. There’s just no effort, and there are multiple parts in the battle where the lack of effort is really obvious and laughable. I suppose there’s an OK line here and there, but there’s just not nearly enough for me to consider it “good” by any stretch of the imagination. 3.5/10

Harry Potter’s Best Line: Your rhymes couldn’t even burn on the planet Tatooine!
Harry Potter’s Worst Line: Even Han Solo is a better (Rapper than YOUUUUUU)
Luke Skywalker’s Best Line: My dad may be mean, but at least I have one (I’m sorry, I honest to God couldn’t get anything better than this)
Luke Skywalker’s Worst Line: Your disses are boring, they make me yawn

Final Results:
Harry Potter: 11.5/20
Luke Skywalker: 5.5/20

Total Score: 29/70

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Harry Potter’s Worst Line: Even Han Solo is a better (Rapper than YOUUUUUU)

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fuck you that's the best line

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Oh, it absolutely would've been if Polar told me to review it for entertainment value alone.

What I'm saying here is, blame Polar.

Here’s my review of Clemi vs. rangernumberx. Next is Luis Suarez vs. Edward Cullen.

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Clemi-Round 1: The first line is pretty filler, but the second line is a decent pun. The next few lines range from referenceless jokes to jokeless references, but the Hitler line and Jack the Ripper line are both good. I really like how the grunts were handled here, it’s pretty funny. The Billy no mates line is a pretty good reference, as are the lines at the end of the verse. 8.5/10

rangernumberx-Round 1: First line is nothing special, but the second line is pretty funny. The killing comparison is pretty good and the board game line is also pretty clever. The French hens line is good and the limes pun is too. The next few lines have a few references, but not too many jokes. I like the Big Ben reference a lot and the YN line is alright too. 8.5/10

Clemi-Round 2: The handicap line is decent, nothing brilliant but it’s a nice dis. The tea bag line is pretty funny, and the French kiss line is pretty nice too. Listing all of the forumers you’ve “beaten” is more referencey than jokey, but at least the last line is good. 8.5/10

rangernumberx-Round 2: I like the Friday dis. The blog line is OK, but the following line isn’t a reference, to my knowledge. The Dreadnaughts line is good, the ZeMasked line is more of a reference than a joke, but the Dion’s lungs line is pretty funny. Not quite enough for the win, unfortunately. 8/10

Overall: A bit of a step up from the last Clemi vs. ranger REWF I reviewed. The reference to joke ratio is definitely higher in this one, and there’s quite a few more laughs as a result. Still a filler line and a jokeless reference here and there, but it’s not very noticeable this time around. 8.5/10

Clemi’s Best Line: Step to me, and have a better POV to French kiss my ass
Clemi’s Worst Line: There's a moment when you should be careful, Ranger !
rangernumberx’s Best Line: Making me feel sicker than your baguette laden pizza!
rangernumberx’s Worst Line: I don't give a damn if you’re in my way

Final Results:
Clemi: 17/20
rangernumberx: 16.5/20

Total Score: 42/50

Yes, yes, keep them coming.

EDIT: this too btw

http://www.erboh.com/forum/showthrea...-Battles/page3

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Next is Luis Suarez vs Edward Cullen

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If you need help with references PM me.

Here’s my review of ERB Crazy’s Luis Suarez vs. Edward Cullen. Next is Clemi vs. BBGUN.

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Luis Suarez-Round 1: The ref line is pretty clever, although there are much better Jacob lines you could make than this. The next two lines are more references than jokes. Upon further looking at it, the carnivore vegetarian line is funny, but the following line is really not much of a joke. The hundred years old virgin line is pretty funny, and the team Blade line isn’t bad either. 7.5/10

Edward Cullen-Round 1: The Alice line is a reference, sure, but it’s not that much of a dis. The dive line is really nice though, and the red cards line isn’t bad either. The schoolboy line is decent, but the last line is a bit of a miss for me, just because “destroying bad temper” is a bit awkwardly worded for me. 7.5/10

Luis Suarez-Round 2: Watching people sleep is a joke that really could’ve made for something good, but it just feels stated here and not joked about. The crowd and hat tricks lines aren’t really jokes either, while the gold pile line is pretty great, and the verse is completely redeemed at the end with the love story line and the Cedric Diggory line. 8.5/10

Edward Cullen-Round 2: “Kicking balls” is pretty clever. While the “bit a few people” thing gets a bit repetitive after being used in two consecutive lines, the team Edward line is pretty good, and the header line isn’t too bad either, even though two balls jokes for one verse seems a bit much. The Renesmee reference is decent, and the cheap rhymes line is alright too, so this verse is actually pretty great. 9/10

Overall: The last two verses are a lot stronger than the first two. You’re making a lot of jokes here, it’s just that a lot of them miss. So when you write a line, think “could this make someone laugh in real life?” and do that for every line, because some of these feel like stretches. Or just do whatever you did for the last two verses. 8/10

Luis Suarez's Best Line: My gold pile shines brighter than you in the sun
Luis Suarez's Worst Line: Hand balled a football got Uruguay to semifinal
Edward Cullen's Best Line: So you better fake a dive and stay put to the ground
Edward Cullen's Worst Line: Or else I'll show you my vampiric skills and how to get fouled

Final Results:
Luis Saurez: 16/20
Edward Cullen: 16.5/20

Total Score: 40.5/5

Glad you like it . For the first verse I said telepathetic instead of telepathic.

Here’s my review of Clemi vs. BBGUN. Next is Gunnut vs. King in the North.

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BBGUN-Round 1: COMING SOON is pretty threatening, and the uzi line is pretty good too. I like the flocabulary line and the parody of the Poe’s poems line, while the rest of the verse is mainly references and not really jokes. Pretty impressive, actually. 8.5/10

Clemi-Round 1: The Gap line doesn’t do much for me, since I don’t see what Gap has to do with either of you, but the kindle line is pretty good. The big bad butt line is kind of predictable, and there are better “big bad” jokes to make. The Room reference seems a bit out-of-place, and the next two lines aren’t really references, but the “eating this morning” line is a pretty great reference, and the mad doge line is pretty nice too. Near the end of the verse, a few lines seem wasted, like the text files line and the porn line, but I like the realistic erb arts reference. 7.5/10

BBGUN-Round 2: This is unfortunately the weakest verse in the battle. The first line isn’t that bad, but I don’t really see how Clemi pretends to do any of that stuff. I also don’t like how the Crasher Vania parody is just brought up, not joked about or anything. To be fair, the real ERB did that with the cameos line, but still. The third line is just confusing and the last line doesn’t seem to have any references. 6.5/10

Clemi-Round 2: The first two lines are pretty good disses. The bad night line could’ve been a lot stronger. Putting lines in a different language can get boring if overdone, but in moderation like this one, it’s alright. The Tunecore line isn’t bad either, but the zyroda reference seems kind of random, and the rename line isn’t too impressive either. 8/10

Overall: There’s not much I can say about this aside from that this is a good battle, but it has a lot of jokeless references. References are good, and having too many is better than having none for sure, but you need to be careful to not just mention things. Work them into some classic insults or make puns about them or something. 7.5/10

BBGUN’s Best Line: Your raps are as mature as flocabulary! Snap!
BBGUN’s Worst Line: While this bitch just leaves opponents bored
Clemi’s Best Line: Dropped out our last duel, but can't drop a single valid pun
Clemi’s Worst Line: Pouty little kid with no skill as a writer

Final Results:
BBGUN: 15/20
Clemi: 15.5/20

Total Score: 38/50

Here’s my review of Gunnut vs. King in the North. Next is zyroda vs. JohnGoopy.

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King in the North-Round 1: I found the BBGUN with a straight face line pretty clever, actually. The Dion’s teats line seems a bit random, the next line isn’t really a reference, the Rob line is kind of a broad reference, the next line is another filler and the next line isn’t a boast or a dis. The thirteenth forumer-architect line pair isn’t bad, but there aren’t really any jokes for the rest of the verse. 7/10

Gunnut_Doe-Round 1: The first three lines aren’t disses or boasts, so nothing too great there. The outside line isn’t brilliant, but it’s good enough. I found the next two lines pretty funny, but the rest of the verse is just references without jokes. 7.5/10

King in the North-Round 2: This verse is pretty much just jokeless references. The rapestickist line is alright, I guess, but the calculations line is pretty much just the same as the line from the original battle, just a bit forumized. I like the reference in the last line, but that’s pretty much it for this verse. 7/10

Clemi-Round 2: First line made me laugh, even if it isn’t really a dis or a boast. I’m going to put it under the same category as the “Did somebody say” lines, just because I want to give points for that. The Voltaire reference is pretty good, but the calculation response was kind of done before by Lohuy, and I don’t really get the plums line. The double account lines aren’t too clever, but they work as parodies, and the last line is good. 8/10

Overall: The battle suffers from a mix of two problems. One is that it often focuses more on parodying the lines than trying to make the lines clever as standalone line, and the other is that there are a lot of jokeless references that feel more like mentions. There are some exceptions in parts, but you’ll need to work on that in the future. 7.5/10

King in the North’s Best Line: (Of all the forum minds in history) They put BBGUN with a straight face up agaisnt me?
King in the North’s Worst Line: You waste time being a total phony
Gunnut_Doe’s Best Line: Your number of names is exemplary, but you're number of friends am tear! (Carlos Sagan: Oh!)
Gunnut_Doe’s Worst Line: Cause I figure that your about to get beat!
Clemi’s Best Line: Why don't pick up a brain your own size ? (Wait what)
Clemi’s Worst Line: As I don't cause I put the swag in plums

Final Results:
King in the North: 14/20
Gunnut_Doe: 7.5/10 (equivalent to 15/20)
Clemi: 8/10 (equivalent to 16/20)

Total Score: 37/50

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Here’s my review of Gunnut vs. King in the North. Next is zyroda vs. JohnGoopy.

Spoiler: 

King in the North-Round 1: I found the BBGUN with a straight face line pretty clever, actually. The Dion’s teats line seems a bit random, the next line isn’t really a reference, the Rob line is kind of a broad reference, the next line is another filler and the next line isn’t a boast or a dis. The thirteenth forumer-architect line pair isn’t bad, but there aren’t really any jokes for the rest of the verse. 7/10

Gunnut_Doe-Round 1: The first three lines aren’t disses or boasts, so nothing too great there. The outside line isn’t brilliant, but it’s good enough. I found the next two lines pretty funny, but the rest of the verse is just references without jokes. 7.5/10

King in the North-Round 2: This verse is pretty much just jokeless references. The rapestickist line is alright, I guess, but the calculations line is pretty much just the same as the line from the original battle, just a bit forumized. I like the reference in the last line, but that’s pretty much it for this verse. 7/10

Clemi-Round 2: First line made me laugh, even if it isn’t really a dis or a boast. I’m going to put it under the same category as the “Did somebody say” lines, just because I want to give points for that. The Voltaire reference is pretty good, but the calculation response was kind of done before by Lohuy, and I don’t really get the plums line. The double account lines aren’t too clever, but they work as parodies, and the last line is good. 8/10

Overall: The battle suffers from a mix of two problems. One is that it often focuses more on parodying the lines than trying to make the lines clever as standalone line, and the other is that there are a lot of jokeless references that feel more like mentions. There are some exceptions in parts, but you’ll need to work on that in the future. 7.5/10

King in the North’s Best Line: (Of all the forum minds in history) They put BBGUN with a straight face up agaisnt me?
King in the North’s Worst Line: You waste time being a total phony
Gunnut_Doe’s Best Line: Your number of names is exemplary, but you're number of friends am tear! (Carlos Sagan: Oh!)
Gunnut_Doe’s Worst Line: Cause I figure that your about to get beat!
Clemi’s Best Line: Why don't pick up a brain your own size ? (Wait what)
Clemi’s Worst Line: As I don't cause I put the swag in plums

Final Results:
King in the North: 14/20
Gunnut_Doe: 7.5/10 (equivalent to 15/20)
Clemi: 8/10 (equivalent to 16/20)

Total Score: 37/50

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YUS.

I WIN.

YUS.

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Originally Posted by GonadTheNomad

YUS.

I WIN.

YUS.

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Actually, Clemi did.

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Originally Posted by rangernumberx

Actually, Clemi did.

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To be fair, they were on the "same team" and Gunnut ALSO beat KITN